ext_56454 ([identity profile] twinsarein.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sinderella81 2008-07-07 08:38 pm (UTC)

Wow that was hot! Loved Lex's sensitivity and Clark's reaction to it and I won't even get into what the shower scene did to me. Great fic.

A few things, if you won't take offense: "sprawled out elegantly in a nearly chaise" should be nearby, "sinking deeper and depper" should be a second deeper, "Clark swan around" should be swam, "fully uncased inside his lover" should be incased, and "wrapping his arms his lover" around should be before the second his.

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